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The number of people suffering from health problems caused by a modern lifestyle which cannot be treated with modern medicines. Some people believe that alternative medicine can help. Do you agree that alternative medicines are effective?

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What is the
color
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 of your university webpage - There is some mixed combination of
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 but the majority is green and white
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.  Where is located geographically? Location, Nearest Air Port, Travel time From Air Port to University how long it takes by Road, tube ….... -
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 University
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 in central Scotland in England with over 120 different nationalities represented
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 its 14,000 students.
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, the nearest airport is Glasgow and it is approximately 45
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 drive to reach
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 airport
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 2 hours.  What is the full cost of the course in GBP
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 cost of the course is 25,020 pounds.  Do you have any family in the UK? - No, I do not have any family
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 who currently live in the UK.
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