Nowadays more and more people buy and use their own cars. Do you think the adventages of this trend for individuals overweigh its disadventages for the environment?

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What is your current occupation? -I am working in S K Consultancy as
Project
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Supervisor. Do you have relatives who have studied at
similar
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a similar
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level or studied overseas? -No, I do not have any
relative
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relatives
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who have
study
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studied at
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this
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similar level or overseas. Do you think your course is appropriate for someone your age? -No, I think age is just
a numbers
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a number
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and everyone can easily learn anything if he or she
have
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good grasping power and knowledge. Who is financing your studies? -I will manage my study
cost
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taking
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by taking
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loan
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from
bank
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. What is the profession of your financial
sponsor
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and what relationship
they
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do they
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have
to
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with
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you? -I do not have any
sponsor
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. I will manage myself. Do you have evidence of the financial status of your financial
sponsor
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, e.g. bank statements for
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last
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6 months, bonds, investments, etc.? -I will take
bank
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loan and after that provide evidence of my financial
sponsor
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. Are you able to verify the genuineness of these documents? -Yes, I will verify the genuineness of my documents. Can you prove the money is available for study? -Yes, I will provide my financial statement. Would you be able to pay your tuition fees in full
up front
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upfront
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? -Yes, I will pay my full student tuition fees in full
up front
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upfront
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. Have you checked the refund policy? -Yes, I have read
refund
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policy. Do you know what your accommodation will cost in the UK? -Yes, I know that
cost
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of accommodation is around 100 pounds per month. Do you know how much your living expenses will be? -Yes, Monthly living
expense
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around
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450 pounds. Do you know whether you are entitled to
work
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part-time in the UK? -Yes, I know as per the UK government policy international students are
allow
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to
work
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part-time. Do you know how many hours are you allowed to
work
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? -Yes,
maximum
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20
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hours per week. Do you know the likely hourly rate of pay? -Yes,
hourly
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the hourly
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rate may be 8-10 pounds age per experience and knowledge. How reliant are you on being able to
work
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? -
It’s depending
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on
situation
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and time and I
reliant
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on hard
work
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and smart
work
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adventages
  • disadventages
  • trend
  • individuals
  • overweigh
  • environment
  • convenience
  • flexibility
  • transportation
  • time-saving
  • efficient
  • commuting
  • independence
  • freedom
  • travel
  • ownership
  • status
  • employment opportunities
  • automobile industry
  • air pollution
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • climate change
  • traffic congestion
  • loss of green spaces
  • wildlife habitats
  • dependence
  • fossil fuels
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