In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views

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Make sure you address both views equally and provide a balanced argument.

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Organize your essay in a clear and logical manner. Each paragraph should have a clear main point.

lexical resource

Expand your vocabulary range by using more varied and precise language.

grammatical range

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Fully explain your ideas

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views

Fully explain your ideas

Environmental damage is a problem in most countries. What factors damage the environment and who should take responsibility?

In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

The best way to teach children to cooperate is through team sports at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many people believe that formal 'pen and paper' examinations are not the best method of assessing educational achievement. What is your view of examinations? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

In the developed world, average life expectancy is increasing. What problems will this cause for individuals and society? Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce the impact of ageing populations.