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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean islan between 2010 and 2017. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compariosns where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean islan between 2010 and 2017. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make compariosns where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the number of visitors
in
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touring a Caribbean
island
 from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
, the sum of tourists has seen a huge increase. People preferred either staying on the
island
 or the cruise ship and the demand for cruise ships has
raised
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 over the years. It is clear from the chart that, the
visitors
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number of visitors
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have
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has
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 increased throughout the span of 7 years.
Initially
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Initially,
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 in 2010, only 1
million
 people made it to the
island
 and it kept going up till 2015
where
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when
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is
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it
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 plateaued for a
while
and
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then
 in 2016 the population of
the
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travellers sky-rocketed. In 2010, journeyers chose
staying
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to stay
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 on the land and these numbers kept climbing till 2013 and stayed the same
2
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for 2
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more years followed by a sudden dip in 2016, the count falling from 1.5
million
 to 1.25
million
 and in 2017 the values picked up and
bacame
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became
 1.5
million
 again.
On the other hand
, cruise ships
was
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were
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 less desired and the number kept fluctuating between 2010 and 2012.
However
, from 2012 the
passengers
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number of passengers
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 kept expanding and even overtook the number of visitors staying
in
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on
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island
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the island
an island
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 in 2016, reaching 2
million
 in 2017.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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