Friends can you please check my essay. Topic is - Eventually, technology will solve the most important environmental problems the world faces today. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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,
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environmental issues are often solved by technology. For
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example
,
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manufacturing
plants have
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modern filters enabling
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clear the gases
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emitted
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. I fully agree that
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technoligical approch
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technological approach
helps to mitigate
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environmental
problem
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. Recent research states that
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share of
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budget includes
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research
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aiming to explore and implimente
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of
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the envirmnent
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envirmnent
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environment
from the adverse effects of human
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beings
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. Most of these methods are successfully implemented in practice like
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utilisation of solar panels which allows to
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carbon
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emission
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by 15%
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compared
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method.
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, technological approaches have
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in the case of
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adverse
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of overpopulation.
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Because
people
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emit
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green house
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gases which can not be utilised by
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technological
methods,
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it leads to deploying
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ozone
layer and,
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, to global warming. No doubt,
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technologies
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us to
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mitigate the adverse
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effects
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environment
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, but society
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to solve
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environmental issues. Only combining
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those two approaches may help to make our
palnet
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planet
green.
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