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Friends can you please check my essay. Topic is - Eventually, technology will solve the most important environmental problems the world faces today. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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,
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environmental issues are often solved by technology. For
expample
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example
,
manufactring
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manufacturing
 plants have
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modern filters enabling
to
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them to
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 clear the gases
imitted
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emitted
omitted
. I fully agree that
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the technoligical
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technoligical approch
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technological approach
 helps to mitigate
envirinmental
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environmental
problem
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problems
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. Recent research states that
essential
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 share of
US
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the US
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 budget includes
reserch
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research
 and development
cost
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costs
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 aiming to explore and implimente
a new methods
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new methods
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 of
protection
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protecting
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the envirmnent
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envirmnent
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environment
 from the adverse effects of human
being
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beings
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. Most of these methods are successfully implemented in practice like
eco-friendly
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the eco-friendly
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 utilisation of solar panels which allows to
reduce
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carbon
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of carbon
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emission
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emissions
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 by 15%
comapred
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compared
 to
prior
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the prior
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 method.
However
, technological approaches have
limitation
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limitations
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 in the case of
pervasive
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the pervasive
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 adverse
effect
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effects
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 of overpopulation.
Becasue
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Because
 people
emite
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emit
emits
green house
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greenhouse
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 gases which can not be utilised by
thechological
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technological
 methods,
so
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it leads to deploying
ozon
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ozone
 layer and,
as a result
, to global warming. No doubt,
thechnologies
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technologies
 enable
to
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us to
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 mitigate the adverse
affect
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effects
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to
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on
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environment
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the environment
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, but society
also
 should make
commitment
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a commitment
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 to solve
the
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environmental issues. Only combining
of
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those two approaches may help to make our
palnet
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planet
 green.
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Task Response
Ensure that your essay fully addresses all aspects of the prompt. In this case, you should discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement. Make sure to clearly state your position and support it throughout the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your essay has a clear and logical structure, with a clear introduction and conclusion. However, make sure to organize your supporting ideas in each paragraph and connect them logically to enhance the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource
Your essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary, but try to incorporate more advanced or specialized vocabulary to further enhance your lexical resource. Additionally, pay attention to word choices and ensure they are accurate and appropriate to convey your ideas effectively.
Grammatical Range
Overall, your grammatical range is satisfactory, but there are some areas for improvement. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement, verb tenses, and sentence structure to avoid errors and enhance clarity.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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