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The digram shows differences in temperature zones between tropical mountains and temperate mountains

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This
digram
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diagram
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give
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gives
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 information about two different
mountines
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mountains
mounting
 and
the
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their
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temerature
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temperature
temperate
 zones of them they are
trapical
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tropical
mountains
 and temperate
mountains
. On the one hand, Tropical
mountains
show
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are
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 bigger than temperate
mountains
. First of all, the tropical
mountain
 in
snow
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the snow
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 line it's permanent snow the altitude
meters
 it's almost 5500
meters
 and the
feet
it's
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are
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 about 1900.
In addition
, The temperature zone (used for coffee and coca plantations) it's take a higher one
it's
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it
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start
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starts
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 from 0 to nearly 1500
meters
 and
also
began
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 from 0 to almost 6000
feet
.
On the other hand
,
also
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apply
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the
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apply
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temperate
mountain
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mountains
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show
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are
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 smaller than
other
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another mountain
other mountains
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mountain
.
First,
the cool zone General cultivation of grains, potatoes flax
they
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apply
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start in Altitude
meters
 and
feet
 first from zero to about 1500,
next
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and next
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 start from zero to nearly 5000.
However
,
limit
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the limit
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 for broad-leaf trees
it's
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is
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 between 5000-6000
feet
 and
in
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apply
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1500
meters
.
Moreover
, the snow line it's exactly
in
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apply
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10000
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10,000
feet
 and
in
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about 3000
meters
.
To sum up
, we see the
different
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difference
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 in temperature zones between two
mountains
.
Also
, we see the amount for both of them.
In addition
, the
intresting
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interesting
thing
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think
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 it's the "Alpine meadows"
it's
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it
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bigger
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a bigger
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size
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in size
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 in
temperate
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the temperate
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mountain
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mountains
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 than
tropical
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in tropical
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mountain
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mountains
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.
Moreover
, in temperate
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mountains
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mountain
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mountain,
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 it's between almost 6000-10000
feet
 and between nearly 1500-3000
meters
.
However
, in tropical
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mountains
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mountain
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mountain,
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 it's in
feet
 and
meters
 between about 15000-16000
feet
 and between 4000-4500
meters
 respectively.
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