some people think that the best way to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving a car or motorbike. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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believe that if we make the minimum legal
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up for driving anything we will improve
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safety
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young
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don't prefer
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believe maybe if all young
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drive
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they will have a lot of
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and traffic
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the
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the street without
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if there
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or not.
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, they want the government
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the minimum legal
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as soon as because they think the
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who have the minimum legal
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don't understand everything about
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think it's
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age
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of the minimum legal
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for driving.
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, they believe
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older
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can
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an accident
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accident
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and that
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noe
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no
reason to increase the
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of driving.
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idea to improve
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safety
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a hard test driving for all of them.
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are a lot of family waiting
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child
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in minimum legal
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for driving because maybe they have some
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and they cannot
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, they believe the government should put a hard rule for
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drive
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such
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as
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if
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someone
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drive
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up the speed limit they should take
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driving
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license
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them
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and
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that suggestion to avoid
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the minimum legal
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for driving and
they
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will improve
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safety
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conclusion, in my
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, I think they can
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very well than older.
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,
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believe they can do it if the government give them some class about
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safety
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and they will understand.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • minimum legal age
  • road safety
  • cognitive skills
  • decision-making abilities
  • comprehensive driver education
  • unlicensed driving
  • economic implications
  • mobility
  • stricter enforcement
  • traffic laws
  • driver education
  • road accidents
  • mature and responsible
  • illegal driving
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