some people think that the best way to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving a car or motorbike. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

These days, some
people
believe that if we make the minimum legal
age
up for driving anything we will improve
road
safety
. In
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agree and disagree
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will draw my personal conclusion. On the one hand, the
people
who
are agree
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with that
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think
the
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young
people
don't prefer
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road
rule
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such
as speed limit or traffic
light
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.
Moreover
, they
also
believe maybe if all young
people
drive
they will have a lot of
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accidents
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and traffic
in
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the
road
.
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, they
also
think they will
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the street without
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if there
someone
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or not.
However
, they want the government
increase
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the minimum legal
age
as soon as because they think the
people
who have the minimum legal
age
they
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don't understand everything about
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road
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.
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, the
people
who
are
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disagree with
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think it's
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age
of the minimum legal
age
for driving.
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, they believe
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older
people
can
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accident
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and that
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noe
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no
reason to increase the
age
of driving.
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, they have
next
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idea to improve
road
safety
such
as
make
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a hard test driving for all of them.
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, they think
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are a lot of family waiting
their
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chaild
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child
become
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in minimum legal
age
for driving because maybe they have some
problem
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problems
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and they cannot
drive
.
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, they believe the government should put a hard rule for
road
drive
such
as
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if
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someone
drive
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up the speed limit they should take
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driving
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license
of
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them
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and
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that suggestion to avoid
increase
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the minimum legal
age
for driving and
they
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apply
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will improve
road
safety
.
To
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conclusion, in my
opinion
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I disagree with that
think
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.
Moreover
, I think they can
drive
very well than older.
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,
i
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believe they can do it if the government give them some class about
road
safety
and they will understand.
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