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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show the highest educational degree earned by King City residents, and the average household size in King City from 1950 - 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show the highest educational degree earned by King City residents, and the average household size in King City from 1950 - 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The line graph illustrates the changes in the educational
degree
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 earned by the inhabitants of King City between the years 1950 and 2000.
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While the
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 second graph depicts the
overall
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 trend in the mean household size in King City during the same timeframe.
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, the residents earning a high
school
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degree
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 and the average household size faced a similar trend over the years. In both cases, tIll 1990, the numbers declined after which the lines plateaued. As seen evidently from the first graph, the
number
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 of
people
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 finishing up a college
degree
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 and the
number
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 of
people
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 who have earned a Post-graduate
degree
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 have risen from 1950 to 2000, by approximately 35% and 10%.
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, the
number
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 of residents with no high
school
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degree
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 or only a high
school
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degree
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 faced a decline
by
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of
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 approximately 10% and 40%. An
intresting
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interesting
 feature is that
,
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apply
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 inhabitants having no high
school
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degree
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 and the ones earning a post-graduate
degree
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 had opposite trends throughout the year.
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SImilarly
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Similarly
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,
people
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 earning a high
school
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degree
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 and
people
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 earning a college
degree
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also
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 had opposite trends throughout the years. In
concluion
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conclusion
, from 1950 to 2000, the household size
reduced
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was reduced
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 by 1 unit.
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, the
number
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 of inhabitants without a
degree
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 or only a high
school
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degree
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also
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 reduced in numbers.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words degree, school, number, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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