The charts show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car

The charts show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car
The pie charts illustrate the different types of causes of
people
who are using
cycle
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cycles
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or
car
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to job.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen from the chart that,
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health and fitness and less pollution are the main
reason
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reasons
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of
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employees prefer to use
cycle
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.
On the other hand
, comfort is the main reason behind using
car
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to commute.
To begin
with, 13
percent
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of
people
consider no cost
while
they are using
cycle
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a cycle
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. At the same
time
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the least number of employees think cycling is faster than
car
, which is 12
percent
. When it comes to health and pollution,a large number of
people
prefer
cycle
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, at 30
percent
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each. Only 15% think that using
cycle
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is not a problem for parking.
Nevertheless
, in terms of using
vehicle
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for commute distance is the second greatest chunk. It accounts for around one-fifth. Consideration of reaching faster than
cycle
and
needs
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to carry things to work remain same, which is 14
percent
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. The least number of
people
think it is safer than
cycle
. To be precise 11
percent
. The major reason why job holders use
car
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for
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is for
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their comfort.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, cycle, car, percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.

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  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • commute
  • sustainable
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • carbon footprint
  • fuel expenses
  • parking availability
  • gridlock
  • mass transit
  • individual choice
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