The charts show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car

The charts show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car
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The two provided pie charts illustrate the reasons why people decide to bike rather than drive to work.
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, the average of each
individuals
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has preferred driving
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cycling
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their comfortable things and it might be faster compared to the other staff. Looking into the details, it can be seen that 30
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preferred cycling for health and fitness; another side effect was the same amount of pollution, from which it can be concluded that it has less impact on the environment.
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, 15
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of each individual complained that no parking areas were being provided. Nearly 12 to 13
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said the advantage of biking was that it was less expensive and faster than driving.
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, 40
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of respondents preferred driving because it was
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comfortable. Almost 21
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give
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the reason that the distance to work was quite far from their accommodation areas. 11 to 14
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preferred
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because it was easier to carry things than biking, and the other two reasons were that it was safer and faster than cycling.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • commute
  • sustainable
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • carbon footprint
  • fuel expenses
  • parking availability
  • gridlock
  • mass transit
  • individual choice
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