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Some people think that students should learn a range of practical skills at school (such as car maintenance or managing money) alongside traditional subjects like maths and physics. Do you agree or disagree with this view?

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It is said that
students
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 to learn additional
skills
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 that will be useful to them in
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,
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 as car maintenance and money management,
along with
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 traditional subjects currently studying in schools.
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the reasons why the changes in the
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 curriculum are extremely important and necessary for society.
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 day and age, the
school
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 curriculum includes a huge number of different subjects that cover the gigantic variety of science. An extensive study of all
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 knowledge takes up a huge amount of
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 in a teenager’s
life
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.
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 free
time
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 is usually spent studying and completing tasks , which has a detrimental effect on the development of other
skills
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 that will be more useful in
life
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. The study of practical
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 can make average
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students
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life
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 easier.
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due to
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the appearance of
a teenagers
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 with more free
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,
it
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lead to more enjoyable and happier lives for
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 generation.
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, in the long
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 additional
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 lead to increasing productivity of population and
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 mobility.
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time
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 start to gain experience in
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money management,
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time saving
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 and financial independence, they definitely
became
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 more efficient and successful in their work and
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.
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 kind of change will improve the quality of
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 for all people. In conclusion, I absolutely agree with
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 curriculum ,
that
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improve
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the economical
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economical
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skills
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for
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students
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.
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 will bring great benefits for
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 , who will
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 our future and industrial progress.
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task response
Provide a clear and direct answer to the prompt at the beginning of your essay. This helps the reader understand your position.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that there is a clear logical structure in your essay, with well-developed paragraphs that flow smoothly.
lexical resource
Expand your vocabulary and use more specific and precise language to convey your ideas.
grammatical range
Pay attention to your sentence structure and grammar, as there are some errors present.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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