The charts show the reasons why people travel to work by bicycle or by car
The bar graph shows why people choose to go to
work
by driving or Cycling.Overall
,it is evident from the charts that most people travel to work
by cycling because there's less pollution and it promotes health and fitness,while
some individuals chose
to drive Wrong verb form
choose
majorly
because of comfort.
Rephrase
mainly
To begin
with,A larger percentage of people at
40% chose to travel by car to Change preposition
apply
work
for Comfort,while
a similar pattern was observed among those who enjoy cycling to work
because of less pollution, Health and pollution as they had an equivalent figure of 30% respectively.Similarly
,Those who stated their reasons of
going to their workplace by driving a car to be Change preposition
for
as a result
of faster transportation when compared to cycling and the need to carry things to work
had the same percentage at almost one-fifth of the total.
Finally
,The percentage of those who engaged in cycling to work
as a result
of Safety was at 11%,Just a little lesser
than those who cycled to Correct word choice
less
work
as a result
of no costs and Faster than driving.However
,Slightly above one-fifth had to go to work
via a
car because of the distance.Correct article usage
apply
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