0# Technology is being used more and more in education / Discuss the advantages and disadvantages? (introduction

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level. Electronie machines

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being used increasingly in

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education

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how machines

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, trainees learn

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things throw their education when they go to school, learnt

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where they have any type of skills where these institutes

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Education is very easy 1 Throw for our global development technology and essential (Paragraph # 2)

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computrization

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

339 words

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0# Technology is being used more and more in education / Discuss the advantages and disadvantages? (introduction

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Some people feel that manufactures and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of foods. Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some children spend hours every day on their smartphone. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Some people believe that violent media directly result in violent behavior. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

some people think that schools should focus on academic subjects like algebra, history, and physics, but others think that schools should spent time focusing on practical skills like time management and banking. Discuss both views and give your opinion.