0# Technology is being used more and more in education / Discuss the advantages and disadvantages? (introduction

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0# Technology is being used more and more in education / Discuss the advantages and disadvantages? (introduction

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Air transport is increasingly used to export fruit and vegetables to countries where they cannot be grown or are out of season. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Virtual reality be used as a tool for therapeutic interventions and mental health treatments. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The best way of motivating workers is to offer them performance-based pay packets. Do you agree or disagree?