Some people today feel that physical money will no longer be used in the future. Others feel it will still have some uses. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
Many hold the view that whether physical
money
should be removed or not in the long term. While
I understand that there are several benefits of using cash
, I believe other cash
replacements would be far more advantageous.
To begin
with, physical money
is beneficial in
two main reasons. Change preposition
for
Firstly
, it is believed that using cash
perhaps be more secured
than a bank card in the era of Change the form of the verb
secure
digital
worldAdd an article
the digital
nowadays
. Rephrase
apply
For example
, thieves can easily go shopping online if your credit card details are hacked. In this
case, consumers would prefer physical money
over digital one
. Correct your spelling
money
Secondly
, since a number of old coins or note editions launched by government
are relatively rare and valuable for sale or exchange, collectors might have a strong desire Add an article
the government
for possessing
them. Change preposition
to possess
As a result
, completely removing physical money
seems not favourable.
However
, I believe cash
should be replaced by electronic forms of money
in the future. The first and very obvious reason is that the
flexibility and convenience Change the word
its
of
Change preposition
apply
itself
Correct pronoun usage
apply
offers
a range of advantages. Correct subject-verb agreement
offer
For instance
, customers and businesses now can benefit from purchasing digitally thanks to online payment using credit or debit cards. Another advantage is that electronic payment such
as Apple pay
likely Capitalize word
Pay
encourage
consumers to use less Change the verb form
encourages
cash
, which is safer to some extent by reducing a
number of robbers attempting to aim at vulnerable people Change the article
the
such
as the old. The second reason is that as notes or coins are made of physical materials, generating or disposing
them is more likely to exert severe impacts on (pose a threat to) Add the preposition
disposing of
environment
. Correct article usage
the environment
Therefore
, getting rid of them should be taken into consideration in the future.
In conclusion, it is believed that physical money
has its own advantages. However
, it should be replaced by other digital forms of money
in the future because of aforementioned
reasons.Correct article usage
the aforementioned
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