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you read in a newspaper that a company is going to renovate some school buildings in your local area that are in a poor condition. You would like to offer your help. Write a letter to the charity paying for the renovation.In your letter ● explain why you want to help with the renovations ● suggest what you can do to help ● say when you are available to start work

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Dear Team, I came to know about the advertisement in a
newpaper
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newspaper
new paper
 that your construction company is going to start
a
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apply
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renovation
work
 for the DHC Public
School
from
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apply
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the next month, and I would like to offer some charity funds and
voulenter
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volunteer
work
. Actually, I have
also
 completed my high
school
study
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studies
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from
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at
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 the same
school
 and I know
teachers
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the teachers
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 are quite capable and nice in
this
school
.
However
,
due to
 the current poor infrastructure conditions, the
school
 management authorities have been facing the worst financial phase in order to renovate the institute.
Therefore
, not only
I
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want to support your team by paying $
5000
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5,000
charity
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in charity
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 funds but
also
, being an architect myself, I can help your design team to complete building revotating drawings with my drafting skills and knowledge. Regarding my availability, even though I am working full-time during
week days
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weekdays
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, I will be able to do drawing
work
 during evenings and weekends as per your requirement. Please let me know how I can
sumit
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submit
 my cheque to you and start
work
 with you as a volunteer. Looking forward to your response. Regards, Harpal Singh
Submitted by harpal.singh on

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Task Response
Make sure to address all the given points in the prompt. In the first paragraph, provide a clear explanation of why you want to help with the renovations.
Coherence and Cohesion
Maintain a coherent and logical structure throughout the letter. Use transition words and phrases to connect your ideas.
Lexical Resource
Expand your vocabulary by using more specific and varied words and phrases. This will enhance the lexical resource of your writing.
Grammatical Range
Pay attention to your grammar and sentence structure. Avoid repetitive sentence structures and use complex sentence structures to showcase grammatical range.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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