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Nowadays celebrities earn more money than politicians. What are the reasons for this? Is it a positive or negative development?

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In the modern days, it is getting more and more common that Hollywood stars have more income than professionals in politics. A possible answer to
this
 matter could be that the entertainment industry is one of the wealthiest businesses because of the huge support from people all around the world.
While
 for some
this
 does not make a difference, in my opinion, professionals who study hard should earn more than celebrities. One of the main reasons is that every person in the globe seeks entertainment. It does not matter where you live, if you have access to the Internet you are most likely to end up on a streaming platform
such
 as Netflix or YouTube watching your favourite show
thus
 making these companies earn more money from your views. As an example, in some of the poorest countries, people recognize the name "Shakira" or "Leo Messi", two world-renowned famous superstars.
On the contrary
, those working in politics are not that well known outside of their country of origin. Another reason is that stars generate profit for everything they do,
while
 politicians have a designated salary.
For example
, a single commercial or an ad in social media promoting a brand can cost a huge amount of money for a company. Companies rely a lot on famous people to promote their products which means additional cash for the celebrity
besides
 what they normally do: making movies, doing concerts and more).
This
 does not apply to politicians who every month gain the same salary regardless if they work harder or not. In conclusion, despite the many reasons why celebrities earn more salary than politicians, I think that professionals in the field of politics should gain more because they studied to get there
while
 most celebrities did not.
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Task Response
Provide a clearer opinion on whether the development is positive or negative.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main point and provides support for that point.
Lexical Resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary to express ideas more accurately and effectively.
Grammatical Range
Incorporate more complex sentence structures to demonstrate a higher level of grammatical range.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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