The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.

 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar graph below illustrates the number of
trips
towards and back from school taken by children in an unspecified country during the time period between 1990 and 2010, and the means of
transportation
used.
Overall
, the most used means of
transportation
in different years were private vehicles and walking. Meanwhile, other means of
transportation
varied their use depending on the studied
year
. During 1990, walking alone was the most used method of
transportation
averaging just above 12
million
trips
per
year
.
In contrast
, automobile usage was at its lowest averaging just above 4
million
in the given
year
. Cycling, walking
and
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taking the
bus
and just taking the
bus
fluctuated between 6 to 7
million
trips
per
year
, peaking at their highest usage during
this
year
. In comparison, in 2010 the use of private vehicles peaked, almost tripling the number of
trips
per
year
totalling just above 11 billion of
trips
per
year
.
While
walking alone saw a dramatic decrease, losing half of its usage from previous years. Cycling was the lowest used means of
transportation
amounting to 2
million
trips
,
while
walking and taking the
bus
simultaneously or just taking the
bus
totaled around 3
million
and 5
million
respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words trips, transportation, year, million, bus with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trips
  • children
  • modes of transport
  • walk
  • cycle
  • public transport
  • drive
  • car
  • trends
  • decrease
  • increase
  • shift
  • convenient
  • comfortable
  • commuting
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • significant
  • indicate
  • reasons
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • 20-year period
  • doubled
  • considerable margin
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