The line graph gives information about the number of Iranian, Greek and Turkish students who enrolled at Sheffield University between 2005 and 2009.

The line graph gives information about the number of Iranian, Greek and Turkish students who enrolled at Sheffield University between 2005 and 2009.
The
lines
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graph presents information regarding
total
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a total
the total
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number of
students
who enrolled at
Sheffield
University
from 3
differences
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country
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countries
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Iranian, Greek and Turkish
during
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from
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2005
till
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to
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2009. In general, there
always are
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have been
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students
abroad enrolled at
Sheffield
University
between 2005 and 2009 from
Iran
,
Greece
and
Turkey
.
Students
Abroad from
Iran
and
Turkey
consistently go up every single year.
Although
always
any
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students
enrolled at
Sheffield
University
, there
is
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are
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any differences
of
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in
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total
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the total
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students
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number of students
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abroad from each country. The peak
student
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number of students
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who enrolled at
Sheffield
University
from both
of
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Iran
and
Turkey
happened
at
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in
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2009.
Total
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A total
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160
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of 160
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students
from
Iran
and 120
students
from
Turkey
enrolled
for
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at
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Sheffield
University
at
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on
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2009. The opposite of
Iran
and
Turkey
,
students
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the students
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from
Greece
always
go
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went
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down every single year
start
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starting
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at
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from
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2005 until 2009. As
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a results
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results
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result
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from
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of
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this
data,
peak
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the peak
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year of
students
abroad who enrolled at
Sheffield
University
from
Greece
happened
at
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in
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2005 and both
of
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apply
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Iran
and
Greece
occur
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occurred
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at
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in
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2009.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, sheffield, university, iran, greece, turkey with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go up" was used 2 times.
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