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The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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From 1994 to 2004, the line graph shows how much money was needed in four different nations to buy bananas. All things considered, it is evident that Germany and Japan saw an increase in
this
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 value over the course of the study, whilst the other countries had a nearly constant trend.
First,
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bananas from Germany and Japan were expensive; throughout that time, prices in both nations had significantly fluctuated. Similar to Germany, where banana prices increased from 1.5
dollars
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 per
kg
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 to roughly 1.75
dollars
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 per
kg
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 in 2004, Japan started out with 2
dollars
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 per kilogram (
kg
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) and finished up with nearly 2.5
dollars
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 per
kg
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.
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 figure remained steady at roughly 1.25$ per
kg
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 until the conclusion of the period, notwithstanding a minor increase in the USA between 1997 and 1998. From 1998 to 2003, France's value fluctuated, but it started the period at 2
dollars
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 per kilogram.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars, kg with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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