Too much attention is given to headline-grabbing disasters like earthquakes and floods. Government should concentrate their resources on educating people about the risk they face nearer to home, which can cost far more lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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There is no denying the fact that certain fields are crucial

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growth and governments should pay university fees for students who study these subjects.

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it is a commonly held belief that

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educational policy brings numerous benefits, there is

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an argument that it brings along certain drawbacks.

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topic from both points of view and express my opinion. In conclusion, there are no easy answers to

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, I tend to believe that the advantages of

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educational policy outweigh the disadvantages.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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Relevant & specific examples

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