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Millions of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree ?

There is a common view that the government should spend most
money
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 on
space
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research
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,
while
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 it is argued by some people that
this
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money
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 should be used to develop
in
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Earth
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’s living quality
instead
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.
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 writer’s opinion is spending on
space
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research
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 is necessary
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 the development of humans and the benefits that we can gain. It is vital to understand that if the
money
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 is spent on
Earth
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instead
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 of
space
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, there will be a lot of profits that people can gain. But not only
research
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 on
earth
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 can do
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,
space
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research
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 can
also
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 bring the same benefit or even more.
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,
money
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 can be used to find planets that have suitable requirements for
human
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.
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 scientists, it is not impossible for humans in the future to resettle on a new planet when
Earth
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 has become polluted and out of resources.
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, some suggest that the government should take care of people’s living standards more than in
space
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. The main reason for
this
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 thinking is that some of them might require a better quality of life by paying millions of dollars to enhance facilities in their country.
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, some children in Vietnam can not go to school.
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,
this
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 amount of
money
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 should be spent reasonably for both
Earth
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 and
space
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research
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. In conclusion, despite the way
money
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 must be spent on people's living standards for some inhabitants, t would contend
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 should be spent on
space
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research
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, not only for developing new discoveries but
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 an advantage for human life.

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task response
Make sure to fully address the prompt by discussing both sides of the argument. Consider presenting a balanced view.
coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas in a clear and logical manner. Use paragraphing effectively to separate different points.
lexical resource
Expand your vocabulary and use a wider range of vocabulary to enhance your essay.
grammatical range
Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar to ensure accuracy and clarity of your ideas.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • space exploration
  • scientific discoveries
  • cutting-edge technology
  • pioneering research
  • socio-economic development
  • improved healthcare
  • education
  • poverty alleviation
  • infrastructure
  • balanced approach
  • cost-effective
  • prioritize
  • allocate
  • resources
  • budget
  • investment
  • sustainable development
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