Millions of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree ?

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It is often considered that the government should spend millions of dollars on exploring
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every year.
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, some
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disagree and
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the
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on developing living standards on our
Earth
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. Personally, I completely agree with
this
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stance. First of all, I strongly believe that it is
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to enhance living standards
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around the world. There are
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large
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percentages of the poverty
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, regardless of
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and small countries. They are
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lack of the
healthcares
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,
educations
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, accommodations, jobs and
foods
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in recent years.
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, the
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have to
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about their
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and cost more
money
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to develop them, especially children. They need to spend
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to provide enough
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for children immediately because the children will take over our future. The USA is the best example
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statement, each day, it has more than 500
people
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who are
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and do not have enough
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to pay for their rent house,
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because of the economic crisis. Almost
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people
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have to stay outside and hope to have a helping
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their
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.
Secondly
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, others argue that we should save
money
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and invest
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exploration because they believe in the near future, our
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will not have enough
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for us and it will be out of
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of the
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when the population always increasing every day. So
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, they should pay our
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for
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research to have opportunities to approach
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life
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in
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other
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. They
also
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allow
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to move
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another
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and can
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the proportions of homelessness on
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. In 2020, a group of scientists in England had an experience to go to the moon by spaceship.
Consequently
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, they had
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for us that we might have a chance to approach the moon and live there in the future. By the way, they had the research about the amount of oxygen outside the
earth
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and they
also
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took some animals which went
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planets
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. They really believe that they can have some opportunities to have new
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in
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another
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. Considering all of the above, I totally believe that the
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still have to
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and
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more
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for
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developing the living standards on our
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, especially poverty
people
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because of the lack of
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accommodations, healthcare,
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educations
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,….
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as
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, they complete nice
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on our
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, they have
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thinking
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about the
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on
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and other
planets
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Work on your sentence structure and grammar.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • space exploration
  • scientific discoveries
  • cutting-edge technology
  • pioneering research
  • socio-economic development
  • improved healthcare
  • education
  • poverty alleviation
  • infrastructure
  • balanced approach
  • cost-effective
  • prioritize
  • allocate
  • resources
  • budget
  • investment
  • sustainable development
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