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million of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree ?

#million #dollars #space #research #year #people #money #standards #earth
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 of
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agree
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 that the authority should spend property on improving the quality of
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 on
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 rather than spend on exploring space. It is the opinion of
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 used for space exploration is suitable, because of the new planet for humans and to predict the threat to
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 from the universe. It must be understood that the
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 is not an eternity.
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research from many scientists,
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life
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 on
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Earth
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 is more than 7.5 billion years which mean that if we do not find another planet ,
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human can be extinct.
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, there are much
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time to find that one, so the government are spending
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 on aerospace to prevent the extinction of
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human.
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if they can explore that new one before the destruction of the
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, they can reduce the variety of populations in many countries. It can be more
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 spaces, more materials for
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 to live and to improve civilization. It cannot denied that there are
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 more threats to the
Earth
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 from outer space. There are some like meteorites, collisions with other planets or black holes which can destroy or attack the
Earth
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 whenever they want and can have huge negative effects on the
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's
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. With the support from technology and scientists,
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 can predict
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problems and maybe they can prevent or rescue the
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. In that case of that things,
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 cannot do that without the spent of
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 from the government. In conclusion, it is necessary for the government to spend
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 to explore the universe because of the new
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 for individuals and
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 predict the destruction of the
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • space exploration
  • technological advancements
  • scientific discoveries
  • astronomy
  • satellites
  • international collaboration
  • economic benefits
  • living standards
  • infrastructure
  • education
  • healthcare
  • poverty reduction
  • distribute funds
  • resource allocation
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