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million of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree ?

#million #dollars #space #research #year #people #money #standards #earth
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 of
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 that the authority should spend property on improving the quality of
life
 on
Earth
 rather than spend on exploring space. It is the opinion of
this
 writer that the
money
 used for space exploration is suitable, because of the new planet for humans and to predict the threat to
Earth
 from the universe. It must be understood that the
life
 on
Earth
 is not an eternity.
According to
the
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research from many scientists,
the
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life
 on
the
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Earth
 is more than 7.5 billion years which mean that if we do not find another planet ,
the
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human can be extinct.
Also
, there are much
of
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time to find that one, so the government are spending
money
 on aerospace to prevent the extinction of
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human.
Further
more
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if they can explore that new one before the destruction of the
Earth
, they can reduce the variety of populations in many countries. It can be more
life
 spaces, more materials for
people
 to live and to improve civilization. It cannot denied that there are
much
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 more threats to the
Earth
 from outer space. There are some like meteorites, collisions with other planets or black holes which can destroy or attack the
Earth
 whenever they want and can have huge negative effects on the
Earth
's
life
. With the support from technology and scientists,
people
 can predict
that
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problems and maybe they can prevent or rescue the
Earth
. In that case of that things,
people
 cannot do that without the spent of
money
 from the government. In conclusion, it is necessary for the government to spend
money
 to explore the universe because of the new
life
 for individuals and
also
 predict the destruction of the
Earth
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • space exploration
  • technological advancements
  • scientific discoveries
  • astronomy
  • satellites
  • international collaboration
  • economic benefits
  • living standards
  • infrastructure
  • education
  • healthcare
  • poverty reduction
  • distribute funds
  • resource allocation
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