Millions of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the money should spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree ?
Whether money should be used in
space
exploration or used to develop life qualities is a controversial point. Despite those who said that searching outer space
is more important, I would contend that human should upgrade their life on Earth before thinking about the universe due to
the poverty
of some country
around the world and the lack of knowledge of people about the deep Fix the agreement mistake
countries
space
beyond us.
On the one hand, the life qualities of countries or continents around the world is
not totally good. If the government cannot solve the unemployment and Change the verb form
are
and
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apply
poverty
in their own nation, they might not think about conquering the vast universe out there. If the poverty
situation is continuing
, there will be not Wrong verb form
continues
so
much money for them to build Rephrase
apply
the
huge spaceships to do the research. Correct article usage
apply
This
is true in some countries in Asia such
as Cambodia, Laos, etc and almost all of Africa, where people still suffer poverty
and they are not having any achievement
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achievements
about
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in
this
field.
On the other hand
, human
still know too little about Fix the agreement mistake
humans
space
. Human even cannot control or know about every creature or nook and cranny in their own homeland and that is
the cause why explore
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exploring
the
outer Correct article usage
apply
space
may contain lots of danger. The conditions of space
is
very dangerous for people and they cannot get used to the zero gravity situation immediately Change the verb form
are
For instance
, in 1999, the Mars discovery ship was
exploded because the scientists could not agree on units of Unnecessary verb
apply
measurements
.
In conclusion, I would contend that Fix the agreement mistake
measurement
explore
the universe is dangerous and contains many risks . the authorities around the world might improve the living standards Wrong verb form
exploring
in
Earth before Change preposition
on
send
state-of-the-art expeditions to go into Change the verb form
sending
space
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Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and supporting details. Use appropriate transition words to connect ideas.
coherence cohesion
Improve the introduction and conclusion by providing a clear thesis statement and summarizing the main points.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary to express ideas more precisely and effectively.
grammatical range
Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar to ensure clarity and accuracy in communication.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite