Many people no longer read newspaper or watch tv news programmes. instead they get news about the world from the internet. is this positive or negative development?

These days, many
people
prefer to get new
news
about the whole world from the
internet
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also
they don't prefer to read
newspaper
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newspapers
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or watch
tv
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news
programmes
. In
this
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will discuss the advantages and disadvantages
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that development
also
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i
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will draw my personal conclusion. On the one hand,
they
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are a lot of advantages
of
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that thing. First of all, nowadays we have a lot of
application
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applications
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such
as
instegram
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Instagram
and
facebook
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or
snapchat
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we can see there the new
news
directly.
Moreover
, I can see it
for
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many
time
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times
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and
i
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can share it with my friends.
In addition
, when we
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get
news
from the
internet
with read
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by reading
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newspaper
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and watch
tv
programmes
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short time than both of them.
On the other hand
,
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some
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disadvantages
of
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that.
First,
in social
media
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they
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are many fake
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and they will share
the
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fake
news
and
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that
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will be a big problem for society because all
people
will believe that.
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,
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they
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are a lot of
people
who work for
newspaper
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newspapers
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or
tv
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programmes
they will lose their
jobes
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jobs
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if
people
get
news
from the
internet
insted
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instead
of
read
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reading
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newspaper
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newspapers
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or
watch
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watching
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tv
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TV
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programmes
. In conclusion, there are advantages and disadvantages to
get
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getting
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news
from the
internet
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.
In addition
, The positive development of the
internet
it's
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take
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news
information from
whole
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world.
Besides
, the negative development of the
internet
is
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of fake
news
for all
people
.
Moreover
, the government should support
people
to watch
tv
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programmes
or read
newspaper
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newspapers
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because that will
helping
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help
be helping
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them to increase the economy and save the
people
jobs who work there.
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