Many people no longer read newspaper or watch tv news programmes. instead they get news about the world from the internet. is this positive or negative development?

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These days, many
people
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prefer to get new
news
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about the whole world from the
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internet
Capitalize word
Internet

The word internet should be capitalized in this context.

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also
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they don't prefer to read
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newspaper
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newspapers

It seems that newspaper may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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or watch
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tv
Correct your spelling
TV

The word tv doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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news
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programmes
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. In
this
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essay
i
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I

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will discuss the advantages and disadvantages
about
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of

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that development
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also
Correct word choice
and also

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i
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I

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will draw my personal conclusion. On the one hand,
they
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there

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are a lot of advantages
of
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to

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that thing. First of all, nowadays we have a lot of
application
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applications

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such
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as
instegram
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Instagram

If you don’t want instegram to be marked as misspelled in the future, you can add it to your personal dictionary.

and
facebook
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Facebook

The word facebook should be capitalized in this context.

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or
snapchat
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Snapchat

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we can see there the new
news
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directly.
Moreover
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, I can see it
for
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apply

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many
time
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times

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and
i
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I

The pronoun I should always be capitalized.

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can share it with my friends.
In addition
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, when we
camparison
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comparison

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get
news
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from the
internet
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with read
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by reading

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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newspaper
Add an article
the newspaper
a newspaper

The noun phrase newspaper seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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and watch
tv
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programmes
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it's take
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it's taken

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short time than both of them.
On the other hand
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,
Also
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they are
some
Rephrase
also some

There may be an adverb issue here.

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disadvantages
of
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to

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that.
First,
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in social
media
Add a comma
media,

It appears that you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase in social media. Consider adding a comma.

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they
Correct pronoun usage
there

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are many fake
account
Change to a plural noun
accounts

The singular countable noun account follows the quantifier many, which requires a plural noun. Consider using a plural noun or a different quantifier.

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and they will share
the
Correct article usage
apply

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fake
news
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and
Correct word choice
apply

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that
Correct pronoun usage
which

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will be a big problem for society because all
people
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will believe that.
Although
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,
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apply

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they
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there

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are a lot of
people
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who work for
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newspaper
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newspapers

It seems that newspaper may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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or
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tv
Correct your spelling
TV

The word tv doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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programmes
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they will lose their
jobes
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jobs

The word jobes doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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if
people
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get
news
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from the
internet
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insted
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instead

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of
read
Wrong verb form
reading

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newspaper
Fix the agreement mistake
newspapers

It seems that newspaper may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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or
watch
Wrong verb form
watching

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb watch. Consider changing it.

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tv
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TV

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programmes
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. In conclusion, there are advantages and disadvantages to
get
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getting

The verb get may be in the wrong form after the preposition to. Consider changing it to the gerund form.

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news
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from the
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internet
Capitalize word
Internet

The word internet should be capitalized in this context.

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.
In addition
Linking Words

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, The positive development of the
internet
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it's
Verb problem
apply

There may be a verb use issue here.

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take
Correct subject-verb agreement
takes

It seems that the verb take does not agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form.

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news
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information from
whole
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the whole

It appears that the phrase whole world does not contain the correct article usage. Consider making a change.

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world.
Besides
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, the negative development of the
internet
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is
spread
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the spread

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of fake
news
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for all
people
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.
Moreover
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, the government should support
people
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to watch
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tv
Correct your spelling
TV

The word tv doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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programmes
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or read
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newspaper
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newspapers

It seems that newspaper may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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because that will
helping
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help
be helping

The verb helping after the modal verb will does not appear to be in the correct form. Consider changing the verb form.

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them to increase the economy and save the
people
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jobs who work there.
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