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Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruit and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. SOme people consider it a good idea, but some people oppose it. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Aeroplanes have been used to deliver amounts of fruits and vegetables to countries which are out of season or plants difficult to grow. There are a number of people who believe
that is
 a good idea,
whereas
 others opinion think that it is a bad idea. I contend that a plane which is used to transport food to other countries is a great idea. It must be understood that aircraft take an important role in the way of transport. It can quickly cross forests, oceans, and deserts, and it can pass all of the most dangerous places in the world, so it is convenient to deliver fruits and vegetables to poor countries.
Thus
, the government ought to control the quality check system and try to maintain a system of transportation of foods.
On the other hand
, transporting by
planes
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plane
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 still
have
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has
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 negative problems. Some people think that
use
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using
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aircrafts
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aircraft
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 is
to
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too
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 expensive, government need to use a large of fossil fuels for plane to fly from
this
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one
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 place to another place. So they don't want to spend
to
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too
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 much money
for
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on
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 the
fuels
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fuel
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 so the drawback is very
strongly
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. For me, I believe that if you spend money and time
to help
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helping
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 other people, they will help you when you are in a difficult situation. So if the government help another
coutry
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country
, they will help us again if we
need
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need it
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,
that is
 called friendship.
To conclude
, using aircraft to transport will
also
 bring two sides of advantages, aircraft
also
 have good condition and storage to contain a large amount of vegetables.
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