Some people believe that children should spend all of their fee time with their families. Others believe that this is unnecessary or even negative. Discuss the possible arguments both sides, and say which side you personally support.

Parents are the
one
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who always support their
children
. There is an argument that in
a
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leisure
time
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time,
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children
should
spent
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spend
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quality
time
with their
families
.
In contrast
, there are some that
seems
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to object
it
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to it
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. In most cases,
children
always seek support from their parents or seniors in their
families
.
For example
, In
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, younger
one
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ones
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mostly look up to the older
one
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ones
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in their
families
.
this
is because
the
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teaching that they have been
recieving
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receiving
since young and
this
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make them feel comfortable in sharing their concern
to
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with
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their
families
.
This
is the main
reasons
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reason
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why people
believed
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believe
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that
children
should
spent
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spend
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more
time
with their
families
is
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because they are dependable and able to provide
supports
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support
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to the younger
one
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ones
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.
Thus
, I believe that it is not wrong for them to
spent
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spend
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their leisure
time
with their relatives. Outside family circle can be considered as an important aspect to ensure their future.
for example
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apply
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like
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having wide networking which will make their career path greater.
This
is the reason why some people believe
than
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that
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rather
just
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than just
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minggling
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mingling
with their
families
,
children
should
able
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be able
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to
spent
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spend
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more
time
building networking.
Moreover
,
children
might be able
obtain
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to obtain
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more
informations
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information
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from
outsider
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outsiders
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that might be
beneficials
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beneficial
for them in the future.
However
, in terms of trust,
families
are still more trusting in terms of providing guidance rather than outsiders. It can not be said that
by
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only spending
time
with relatives is just wasting
time
because they
also
can be
source
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a source
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of
informations
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information
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that
are
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dependable and
trustable
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trustworthy
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.
therefore
, I
feel
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disagree with the statement that it
was
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is
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bad
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a bad
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idea to spend
time
with
families
. In Conclusion,
children
will always seek guidance from their
families
first
due to
the trust that
been
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has been
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obtained since they have grown up.
Thus
, it is not a bad thing for them
spend
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to spend
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more
time
with
families
.
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