Some people believe that children should spend all of their fee time with their families. Others believe that this is unnecessary or even negative. Discuss the possible arguments both sides, and say which side you personally support.
Parents are the
one
who always support their Correct pronoun usage
ones
children
. There is an argument that in a
leisure Correct article usage
apply
time
Add a comma
time,
children
should spent
quality Change the verb form
spend
time
with their families
. In contrast
, there are some that seems
to object Change the verb form
seem
it
.
In most cases, Change preposition
to it
children
always seek support from their parents or seniors in their families
. For example
, In asia
, younger Change the capitalization
Asia
one
mostly look up to the older Correct pronoun usage
ones
one
in their Correct pronoun usage
ones
families
. this
is because the
teaching that they have been Change preposition
of the
recieving
since young and Correct your spelling
receiving
this
make them feel comfortable in sharing their concern Correct pronoun usage
apply
to
their Change preposition
with
families
. This
is the main reasons
why people Fix the agreement mistake
reason
believed
that Wrong verb form
believe
children
should spent
more Change the verb form
spend
time
with their families
is
because they are dependable and able to provide Unnecessary verb
apply
supports
to the younger Fix the agreement mistake
support
one
. Correct pronoun usage
ones
Thus
, I believe that it is not wrong for them to spent
their leisure Change the form of the verb
spend
time
with their relatives.
Outside family circle can be considered as an important aspect to ensure their future. for example
Change preposition
apply
like
having wide networking which will make their career path greater. Change preposition
apply
This
is the reason why some people believe than
rather Correct word choice
that
just
Change preposition
than just
minggling
with their Correct your spelling
mingling
families
, children
should able
to Add a missing verb
be able
spent
more Change the form of the verb
spend
time
building networking. Moreover
, children
might be able obtain
more Add the particle
to obtain
informations
from Change the wording
information
pieces of information
outsider
that might be Fix the agreement mistake
outsiders
beneficials
for them in the future. Correct your spelling
beneficial
However
, in terms of trust, families
are still more trusting in terms of providing guidance rather than outsiders. It can not be said that by
only spending Change preposition
apply
time
with relatives is just wasting time
because they also
can be source
of Add an article
a source
the source
informations
that Change the wording
information
pieces of information
are
dependable and Correct subject-verb agreement
is
trustable
. Correct word choice
trustworthy
therefore
, I feel
disagree with the statement that it Verb problem
apply
was
Wrong verb form
is
bad
idea to spend Change the article
a bad
time
with families
.
In Conclusion, children
will always seek guidance from their families
first due to
the trust that been
obtained since they have grown up. Add a missing verb
has been
Thus
, it is not a bad thing for them spend
more Fix the infinitive
to spend
time
with families
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