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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

1.You and your brother have decided to go for a holiday but due to some reason, your brother is not able to join you for holiday. Write a letter to your friend to invite him/her for holiday. Give detail plan of vacation. State reason why your brother will not come with you. Invite your friend.

Dear John, I hope
this
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 letter finds you and your family well. Since we haven't seen each other for more than two years and I
do
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really miss you, I'm writing to you with a special suggestion for a holiday trip to the north.
Last
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 week, I decided to buy two plane tickets for
me and my brother
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my brother and me
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 to travel to the north. I planned everything
including
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, including
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 hotel rooms for us to stay there for three days
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as
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, as
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 well as reserving seats on a recreational boat
which
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, which
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 costs 100 dollars for each person.
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however
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, unfortunately, my brother won't be able to come with me because of his job. Apparently, a structural issue has caused their company to cease to operate properly
and
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, and
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 they have to work double time to fix it immediately. So, I thought that
would
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 be great if you could come with me
instead
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 of my brother. It's going to be so much fun since we get the chance to see each other again. I can't wait to see you soon Best Wishes,

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task response
In your letter, try to have a clear plan in one or two paragraphs and keep ideas in the right order. Start with inviting your friend, then give the plan, then explain why your brother cannot go. Use simple words to link ideas.
coherence cohesion
Use simple linking words like 'first', 'next', 'also', 'but', 'therefore' to help ideas flow. Capitalize the first word of each sentence and use a capital 'I' when you write.
tone
The tone is friendly and warm for a friend.
content
You give clear plan details (tickets, hotel, boat).
structure
The letter has a proper greeting and closing.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • invite
  • holiday
  • friend
  • brother
  • reason
  • work
  • cannot
  • go
  • trip
  • place
  • coast
  • beach
  • hotel
  • room
  • budget
  • cost
  • share
  • plan
  • days
  • day
  • travel
  • train
  • bus
  • car
  • flight
  • book
  • ticket
  • market
  • food
  • water
  • swim
  • walk
  • island
  • boat
  • return
  • pack
  • bring
  • weather
  • sun
  • rain
  • please
  • thank
  • you
  • hope
  • come
  • soon
  • yours
  • best
  • regards
  • sign
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