some children spend hours everyday on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development.
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children
spend a lot of time
on their smartphones.I think that it is a negative development and disadvantages
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mobile phones
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pandemic,
also
extra class work.Children
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benefits
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