One of your friends recently had a birthday celebration, but you missed it and you forgot to tell your friend that you couldn't attend. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, apologise for missing the birthday celebration explain why you missed it and why you didn't tell your friend and say what you would like to do to show that you are sorry
Dear Riya,
I hope that you are doing well. I am so sorry that I missed your birthday party as I was busy with my final year exams. Please accept my apologies and allow me to explain.
Unfortunately, my final exams were scheduled
on
the same week, so I had no choice other than Change preposition
for
focusing
on my studies to perform well in exams. I knew that you would have missed me at the party, but I believe that you can understand my situation.
To your surprise, I have some plans to overcome the situation as I am planning to take you to a beautiful rooftop restaurant for a dinner party. What do you think? Please let me know your convenient time so I can book the table for us.
I am waiting to see you soon.
Please convey my wishes to your parents. Take care till Change the verb form
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yours lovely,
JeeSubmitted by jeeanay on
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coherence cohesion
The logical structure of the letter needs improvement. Ideas could be better paragraphed to enhance the clarity of the message.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are adequate but could be more formally aligned with the context of the IELTS writing task.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph revolves around a single idea for better readability and a stronger argument.
task achievement
The task response is sufficient, but more details could have been provided to fully explain why the event was missed and the absence was not communicated.
task achievement
The tone of the writing is generally suitable, though it swings between formal and informal. Consistency should be maintained throughout.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite