The most important aim of science should be to improve people’s lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

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of lives of
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public. In my opinion, I completely agree with the statement. Because huge
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of money and resources are allocated
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science
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it should
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repay
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by offering
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lives for ordinary people.
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amount of funds are allocated by many countries for scientific research and developments which can
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for other societal activities
such
as
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educations
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education
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,constructing infrastructure,
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poverty,food supply
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etc. Some of
findings
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comes
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through several
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experiments and incur large expenditures.
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of
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this
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high priced
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investments
science
need to focus on
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of people. There are medical treatments, protection measures from natural disasters,
time saving
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instruments,
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food quality
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etc.
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of
science
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on the safety and sustainability of mankind. Some
of
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scientific inventions are challenge human lives and hazardous to living beings which
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harmful
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environment.
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great innovation of dynamite
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by Scientist Nobel which was aimed to assist mining activities.
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, today
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inventions caused
to
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disasters and terrible issues. Those
type
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of harmful inventions directly influence not only specific
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regions
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but
also
it will affect whole human beings. In conclusion, billions of dollars
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for
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science
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field which can
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for other necessities of people. Some scientific findings
leads
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life threatening to individuals and negatively influence
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future generations.
Therefore
,
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object of
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science
need
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to lengthen and elevate
the
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peoples ‘
life style
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lifestyles
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.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that relates to the main idea of the essay.
task achievement
Try to provide more specific examples and evidence to support your arguments.
lexical resource
Expand your vocabulary range by using a wider variety of words and phrases.
grammatical range
Pay attention to sentence structures and grammar to ensure accuracy.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • enhancing
  • quality of human life
  • advancements
  • medicine
  • healthcare
  • scientific research
  • solving societal problems
  • improving living standards
  • global issues
  • climate change
  • food scarcity
  • technological advancements
  • limitations
  • negative consequences
  • ethical considerations
  • sustainability
  • environmental preservation
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