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With recent development in technology like e-books, some people feel that printed media like books, newspapers and magazines will soon be a thing of the past. Others feel that these forms of media will never disappear. What is your opinion?

#development #technology #e-books #people #media #books #newspapers #magazines #forms
The importance of technology, which was always
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 has now become more controversial with many people claiming that it is beneficial
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 others reject the notion.The substantial influence of
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controversy over the potential impact in recent years.In my opinion,
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 proposition appears more rational.
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 which will
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 stems from the fact that printed media provide a tangible and tactile experience.
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Consequently
, old generation people like to read books, magazines and newspapers to get knowledge about current affairs.Another pivotal aspect of
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 authentic and aesthetic appeal.Needless to say, all the merits
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good stead. Elaborating my viewpoint there are more merits but one of the crucial
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 is that printed media is easily available
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 for e-books masses need the internet facility and it
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 more strain on the eyes of kids
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the conclusion that paper-based material is more beneficial than
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task response
Make sure to fully address the prompt and provide a clear opinion on the matter. Your essay should also include relevant examples and arguments.
coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas in a logical and coherent manner. Use appropriate transitions to connect your sentences and paragraphs.
lexical resource
Expand your vocabulary and use a wider range of words and phrases to express your ideas.
grammatical range
Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar. Avoid repetitive or awkward constructions, and aim for a more varied and accurate use of grammar.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recent development
  • e-books
  • printed media
  • thing of the past
  • convenience
  • accessibility
  • tangible
  • tactile
  • save trees
  • reduce waste
  • nostalgia
  • sentimental value
  • eye strain
  • screen fatigue
  • authentic
  • aesthetic appeal
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