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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. Your local council is planning to hold an election to choose members from the society but there are no young people on the council and you think that the council needs young people's views. You are thinking of standing for election. Write a letter to the head of the council. In your letter, state why you want to be elected mention why you think you would be a good candidate describe your qualities, skills, experience, interests, if any Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear .....................,

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Dear Sir, I heard that you are planning to choose members of our
society
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. I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you that I am a good candidate for
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 position. I am
Lavneet
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Navneet
 Kumar, and I am from Sham
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society
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. I am standing in
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society
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 election. Our
society
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 in a lot of candidates for
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 position, but I think now the time has changed the thinking. We will be going with the young candidate because the young candidate is aware of the current situation easily and can easily
mold
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 himself to it. I did a lot of work for our
society
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 and always organized every function and event. I am always ready for the help of people. I have created a good image in
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society
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. I have some
plan
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plans
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 for new development. improving car parking, a new garden, and
play grounds
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playgrounds
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 for
Badmiton
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Badminton
. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours Sincerely,
Lavneet
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Navneet
 Kumar
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coherence cohesion
Address the head of the council by their appropriate title and name, if known.
coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas into clear paragraphs with one main idea per paragraph.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary and more appropriate language for a formal letter.
grammatical range
Use a wider range of sentence structures and pay attention to grammatical accuracy.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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