You recently celebrated a special occasion in your personal life and received a card and a present from your colleagues at work. Write a letter to your colleagues. In your letter: remind your colleagues what the special occasion you were celebrating was thank them for the card and gift explain why you like the gift and how you will use it

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Dear,all my beloved colleagues, I hope
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letter
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you all in
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great health. I am writing
this
letter to immensely say thank you to all my wonderful colleagues for sending
gift
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and
card
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on my very special day. Indeed, it was a special day because I was celebrating my
baby
shower with my family members. Nothing can beat the
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embracing motherhood and I can not wait to hold my first
baby
in my arms. I would like to say how
greatful
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grateful
I am to work with all great team members. During my pregnancy, I could not forget how helpful you all are and I will forever
greatful
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grateful
for all your great support and care. I would like to convey special thanks and blessings that you all showered me as a
gift
and
card
. I
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and
card
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are amazing. A
baby
crib is so beautiful and elegant. My future
baby
will definitely love to sleep in
this
crib. It is
also
in a perfect size and size to fit in my bedroom. I was overwhelmed by emotion by reading a
card
in which everyone
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wrote
special wishes for me. I will forever
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our work fun and bonding.
Lastly
, I will definitely share
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with all
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soon and I will share photos of the newborn
baby
. Thank you for
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the amazing
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gift
and a
card
. Best regards, Khyati
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task response
Ensure that all the required elements of the task are addressed clearly in the letter. In this case, you have mentioned the special occasion and expressed gratitude for the gift and card, but you can provide more details about the occasion.
coherence cohesion
The overall structure of the letter is well-organized, with a clear introduction, main body, and conclusion. However, you could improve coherence by using linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more smoothly.
lexical resource
Your use of vocabulary is appropriate and you have effectively conveyed your gratitude. To enhance your lexical resource, consider using a wider range of vocabulary and expressions.
grammatical range
Your grammar is generally accurate, with only a few minor errors. To demonstrate a wider range of grammatical structures, try incorporating complex sentence structures and varied sentence lengths.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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