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The two tables below show the exchange students from universities in Europe to Australia between 2007 and 2009. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two tables below show the exchange students from universities in Europe to Australia between 2007 and 2009. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two tables give information about how many people came from Europe to Australia to join student
exchange
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 programs and vice versa in the years 2007 and 2009.
Overall
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, the total
number
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 of
exchange
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students
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 who went to France, Sweden, the United Kingdom, Germany, and the Netherlands increased from 2007 to 2009,
while
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 the
number
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 of
exchange
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students
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 from Australian universities to universities in Europe remained the same over the
period
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. In 2007, most
exchange
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students
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 came from France which accounted for 61
students
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 and slightly decreased to 60 in the next two years;
however
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, they still became the highest figure. Statistics of transfer
students
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 from the United Kingdom
also
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 declined from 31 to 26 from the beginning
period
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 to 2009.
In contrast
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,
exchange
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students
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 from Germany to Australia in 2009 was almost twice higher than the initial year of the given
period
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.
While
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 the
number
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 of
exchange
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students
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 from Sweden
also
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 rose from 34 to 42 over the same
period
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, the total
number
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 of
students
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 from the Netherlands remained the same.
Furthermore
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, between 2007 to 2009, the total figures of
exchange
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students
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 from France and Germany to Australia grew from 37 and 18 to 58 and 26
students
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.
However
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, there was a decrease from the other three countries
although
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 the total
number
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 remained the same.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, however, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words exchange, number, students, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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