Million of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree?
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coherence cohesion
Your essay lacks a clear overall structure. Make sure to have an introduction that introduces your main points and a conclusion that summarizes your arguments and restates your opinion.
task achievement
You need to provide more specific and relevant examples to support your arguments. Avoid general statements without specific evidence or examples.
grammatical range
Work on your grammar to ensure correct sentence structure and verb tenses. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement and word order.
lexical resource
Improve your vocabulary and use a variety of words and phrases to express your ideas. Avoid repetitive language and use appropriate academic vocabulary.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite