The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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This

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picture illustrates the procedures for converting

sugar

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cane into

sugar

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Overall

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, there are two stages and seven steps to refine

sugar

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. In the first stage, it takes twelve to eighteen months to grow

sugar

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canes

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cane

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, and after

that

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the farmers start to cut down the

sugar

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canes

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cane

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and pour these crops

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into

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a truck by harvesting

machine

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machines

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and human

labors

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labor

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the

labors

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crushing

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crush

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them

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specific

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a specific

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machine and obtain the

juice

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which is used for refining. In the second stage,

firstly

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, the workers use the limestone filter to purify

juice

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in the factory.

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, they pour the

juice

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into

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evaporator which uses the heat to make the

juice

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become syrup.

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comes to the centrifuging step, the syrup is placed in the facility which can

separates

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separate

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sugar

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crystals from syrup. After finishing all the procedures above, the extracted

sugar

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is place

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is placed

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in a huge container in order to

drying

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dry

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and

cooling

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cool

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it down.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, juice with synonyms.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

156 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

manufacturing process
sugar cane
harvesting
transporting
factory
crushing
extracting
juice
filtering
impurities
heating
evaporating
syrup
boiling
crystallizing
sugar
separating
drying
packaging
distribution
stage
process

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The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brought up by wealthy parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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