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Last month you had an overseas holiday with some friends were you stayed at their house. They have just send you some holiday photos. Write a letter to your friends, in your letter: Thank them for the holday and the photos Explain why didn't write earlier Invite them to come and stay with you

#month #holiday #friends #house #photos #holday
Dear Amy and Alice, I'm writing
this
 letter to thank you for the lovely and blissful photos. Can you believe that it was the best time of my life
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 I appreciate your concern about me. I am so sorry that I didn't write a letter to you from my side. As you know,I am preparing for my IELTS exam so am very busy with it. Not only
this
, but
also
 am working part-time at Canadian Tire because of my hectic schedule and I didn't get enough time to reach out to you,I hope you will understand
this
. Oh! How I forgot
this
 From the next week you are going to be free from your territory studies. So,as you will get a vacation I will invite you for the upcoming week that you can come to my palace. It will be a lot of fun, I will show you traditional temples.
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, we are going be watch movies and enjoy a picnic at my grandpa's farmhouse. Again thank you from my warm heart. I hope
this
 will reach to you soon Your loving friend Inder.
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Task Response
Make sure to address all the points mentioned in the prompt. You have thanked your friends for the holiday and the photos, explained why you didn't write earlier, and invited them to come and stay with you. Good job on meeting the requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion
The logical structure of the letter is clear and easy to follow. However, pay attention to the organization of the paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on a single idea or topic.
Lexical Resource
Your choice of vocabulary is appropriate and conveys your message effectively. Consider using more varied and sophisticated vocabulary to enhance your writing.
Grammatical Range
Overall, your grammar is good with only a few minor errors. However, be mindful of sentence structure, subject-verb agreement, and verb tense consistency.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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