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Some feel that it is impossible for a country to be economically progressive and environmentally friendly at the same time. Others disagree with this view. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion.

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 new millennium,
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much of the world places a premium on combating the issue of the
environment
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 and
economically
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economic
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 growth. Nowadays
people
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 population feel that it is not possible for
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a
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nation to be economically and
environmently
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environmentally
 progressive at
same
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the same
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time
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. I assert that there are scores of views, that
would
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will
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 be explained in the upcoming paragraphs. I
belive
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believe
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 it is possible, that the
environment
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 and economy will grow parallel.
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 with,
one
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 side of the argument, there are few
people
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hold
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who hold
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 the opinion that, nature and money will not develop at
same
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the same
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time
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. The most
complelling
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compelling
 reason for believing
this
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 is that, production of goods.
People
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 think if the industry
produce
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 goods
due to
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this
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 pollution will increase.
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, they will damage the
environment
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 and human health at the same
time
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. The
bussinesman
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businessman
businessmen
 will increase the profit, help the country to grow but
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at
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in
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 the
end
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end,
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 they
rise
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raise
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 the pollution as well.
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, plastic
bag
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bags
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,
shopkeeper
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shopkeepers
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use
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 plastic
due to
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this
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envirnment
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environment
get
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distrubed
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disturbed
.
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,
the
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nature and economic growth will rise at the same
time
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.
Firstly
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,
government
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the government
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 should
introduced
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recycle
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recycled
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product
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products
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. To explicity, they should
use
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recycle
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recycled
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material
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materials
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 like cans, bottles and
bag
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bags
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 as well.
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, they should
use
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 environmentally friendly
material
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materials
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,
while
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 producing the goods or any other items,
due to
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this
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 the country will grow
as well as
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environment
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 will not
effect
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be affected
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.
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 to government should
band
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ban
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 some items which
leads to
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pollute
the
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society.
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, Nowadays in many
countries
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countries,
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people
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use
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 paper bags for shopping,
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, plastic bags are not creating any
problem
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problems
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 in
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environment
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the environment
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. In
the
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conclusion,
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while
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both views are commonly held in society and the government. I
beleive
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believe
 that both will grow at the same
time
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. the profit is important for economic
devleopment
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development
 but at the
dame
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same
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time
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environment
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 is
also
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 paramount for
nation
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the nation
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. So, industry should
use
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recycle
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recycled
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product
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products
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 and
people
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 will contribute
their
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to their
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 effects as well.
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