“Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.”
“Sharing
information
is actual
issue in our world where it has Add an article
an actual
strong
influence on Add an article
a strong
people
. There are various spheres of our life where information
is more or less important for people
working there on out of
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apply
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apply
this
. For
this
reason
some Add a comma
reason,
people
consider that it is good to share
information
while
others think in opposite
way.
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the opposite
For example
, practically all scientists are glad to share
information
with ordinary people
or other scientist
. There is no competition in Change the wording
another scientist
other scientists
this
sphere. Sometimes it is bad for Correct article usage
the govenment
govenment
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government
which
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when
scientist
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scientists
share
the
secret Correct article usage
apply
information
with international spy
but it will not hurt Fix the agreement mistake
spies
information
.
There are some simple rules in academic
world which Add an article
the academic
limite
informational sources between Correct your spelling
limit
people
. If person
is interested in theme Add an article
a person
the person
discussing
with you and you are ready to keep talking Replace the word
discussion
then
the person gives you all information
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the information
what
he knows for free. Correct word choice
that
On the other hand
, if the person knows much and he knows that you can not give him actual or new information
then
he will share
information
with you just for money. For example
. student pay
for his learning Correct subject-verb agreement
pays
while
two students can cooperate and share
information
with each other. It is obviously
that sharing Change the word
obvious
information
in business
world can Add an article
the business
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be followes
followes
by releases. There is large competition and it may Correct your spelling
followed
takes
much costs for companies. Companies Change the verb form
take
loose
their profit every day because Replace the word
lose
some one
can not keep Correct your spelling
someone
silence
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silent
especially
IT companies.
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, especially
To sum up
all above
it is Correct article usage
the above
neccessery
to say that there are some spheres in which sharing Correct your spelling
necessary
information
is a crime. In my opinion, in many cases
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cases,
information
can be too important or sharing
at all.”Wrong verb form
shared
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task response
Ensure that your essay clearly addresses all aspects of the given prompt and presents a balanced discussion of both views.
coherence cohesion
Improve the overall organization and coherence of your essay by following a logical structure. Include clear introductions and conclusions to each paragraph.
lexical resource
Expand your range of vocabulary to make your essay more impressive and varied. Use synonyms and collocations to express your ideas more effectively.
grammatical range
Work on improving the accuracy of your grammar and sentence structure. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement, verb tenses, and sentence formation.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?