You have been working with your company for two years and are interested in a promotion. Write a letter to your direct boss. In your letter: Explain your varied achievements over the past two years Express your interest in growing with the company Ask for a meeting to discuss a potential promotion Write at least 150 words.

Dear Mr. Phillips, I am writing
this
letter to express my feelings towards your company.I have been working for the
last
two years and have done a lot of hard work for
this
firm.So,
this
company has success in the whole world.
To begin
with,all workers do the task with enthusiasm,So that,our
group
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success
touch
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to
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every corner of the nation.
Last
year,I went to Canada for a business trip and our organization got first prize for the quality of the product and I was announced as a skilled Manager.Because
,
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I did
performance
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with focus and completed my project before the deadline.I have been attending meetings with international
businessman
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and they always give positive responses to us.I handled many big deals and
also
got profit from them.
Moreover
,I prefer to
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with you.
Firstly
,I know that everything and strategies.Which needs to grow your group.KPS business
also
provide
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good
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salary and I get
much
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chances to visit other countries through
this
firm.That's why, I want to grow up myself in
this
association.
Furthermore
,I want to ask you
for
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the meeting.I think that you should organise a meeting to discuss
this
.If you agree
then
we will hold a meeting next week at 11am. I am looking forward to your response. Thank you Yours sincerely, Gagandeep Kaur
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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