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International travelling is becoming cheaper and more countries are opening doors to increase the number of tourist. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this

#countries #doors #tourist
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 line graphs provided reveals the figure the changes in the expenditure on food, leisure,clothing,transport and energy in three European countries, counted in
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, from 1980 to 2000.
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, it can be seen that
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most of the data experienced
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 growth pattern, except the data on money consumption
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 leisure. Regarding the amount of
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food
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 money consumption
dwarved
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dwarves
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 dramatically from over 30% to about 15%. In terms of the breakdown of leisure and transport,
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 they have the same commencing point but have different
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. The former was reported to increase slightly and gradually to exactly 15%. The latter fell down minimally to exactly 5%
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 the end year. With regard to the data
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 clothing and energy,
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 they have different starting points but have the same trend. Both of them deteriorated respectively
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 10%, about 5%
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