The two given pie charts present percent of employment pattern in Great Britain for 1992.
The two given pie charts present
percent
of employment Correct your spelling
the percentage
pattern
in Great Britain for 1992.
Workers were separated by their sex and occupation and their field of activity was divided Fix the agreement mistake
patterns
in
two types Change the preposition
into
as
manual and non-manual.
Nearly Change preposition
apply
one third
of male employees worked in Add a hyphen
one-third
managerial
and professional Add an article
the managerial
a managerial
field
which is more than females for an insignificant amount. Fix the agreement mistake
fields
However
in clerical or related Add a comma
However,
Fix the agreement mistake
areas
area
there are five times more women than men. Despite Add a comma
area,
this
Correct determiner usage
these
differences
other spheres are quite the same with distinction in 1 to 3 Add a comma
differences,
percents
.
Fix the agreement mistake
percent
According to
Correct article usage
the diagram
diagram
it is explicitly observed that Add a comma
diagram,
female
population preferred requiring mental effort, Correct article usage
the female
whereas
males were more inclined towards physical effort.Submitted by dnm.best on
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