The pie charts below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The tables shows how these causes affected three regions of world during the 1990s.

The pie charts below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The tables shows how these causes affected three regions of world during the 1990s.
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The pie chart and table illustrate some information about the causes of
land
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degradation and its effects on three different regions of the world in the 1990s.
Overall
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, over-grazing was the biggest reason for worldwide
land
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infertility.
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, the opposite was true for
Oceania
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. To be more specific, the major reasons why worldwide
land
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became less productive were over-grazing and deforestation at 35% and 30% respectively. Followed by over-cultivation at 28%. The other cause was responsible for damage
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7% of the
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.
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looking at the table, 0.2 and 0% of deforestation and over-cultivation were two minor causes of
land
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degradation in North America and
Oceania
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respectively.
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, in
Oceania
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and Europe, over-grazing and deforestation were the biggest reasons for
land
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infertility. The % of total
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that becomes less productive for all reasons was at 5%,23% and 13% for North America, Europe and
Oceania
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respectively. In the North American region, over-grazing is the mild cause at 1.5 for less fertility of agricultural
land
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.
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