Computers are now the basis of the modern world. They should therefore be introduced into classrooms, and their programs used for direct teaching purposes. However, dependence on computers in teaching may carry a certain degree of risk to students. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
It is widely known that
computer
has become an essential thing for people in Correct article usage
the computer
this
modern world, therefore
, is supposed to be introduced directly in school
. However
, there is a doubt that it is likely to have a detrimental effect on school
children
. I tend to think that, in this
technology era we rely too much on computer
to support our daily tasks and Fix the agreement mistake
computers
this
essay will discuss more about these two views in the following paragraph.
On the one hand, it is generally seen that computer
is cutting edge
technology that Add a hyphen
cutting-edge
have
become major tools in order to tackle our daily tasks. Change the verb form
has
This
means that,
people have a tendency to rely on Remove the comma
apply
this
technology and everyone should have at least basic knowledge to operate. School
children
in my country for example
, since it become mandatory to do exam
online, the government provide Add an article
the exam
computer
in every Add an article
a computer
school
with a session to learn that subject in order to support those who never operated the tool. Thus
, providing learning material and having that subject is really beneficial for them in the long run.
On the other hand
, there is a consideration that letting the
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children
use
computer
could bring negative effects on their lives mainly health problems. Fix the agreement mistake
computers
This
is because they spend too much time on screen during class and perhaps still use
it to do an assignment. As a matter of fact, their eyes radiate by and get weakened in front of the screen. Therefore
, in my view
even Add a comma
view,
this
development has Correct word choice
though this
negative
side, still can Add an article
a negative
be mitigate
with simple Change the verb form
be mitigated
rule
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rules
such
as teach
users to Wrong verb form
teaching
use
it accordingly
.
To conclude
, I personally believe that it is undeniably
that Change the word
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computer
is the main source for everyone nowadays. Correct article usage
the computer
That is
the reason why having computer
class at school
is recommended to though children
operate the tools. In addition
, to mitigate any harm caused by computer
can done by encouraging them to Fix the agreement mistake
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