The graph illustrates the attendance figures for Gradville Stadium between 2017 to 2030,wich are projected after a major improvement project.
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Gradville
Stadium between 2017 to 2030,Correct your spelling
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which
are
projected after a major improvement project.
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in 2030 it will be nearly 16000.
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