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The graph illustrates the attendance figures for Gradville Stadium between 2017 to 2030,wich are projected after a major improvement project.

The graph illustrates the attendance figures for Gradville Stadium between 2017 to 2030,wich are projected after a major improvement project.
The graph illustrates the attendance figures for
Gradville
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Grandville
 Stadium between 2017 to 2030,
wich
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which
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are
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 projected after a major improvement project.
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 crystal clear that there are 3 event types in
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both 3
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. When we
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 a closer look
in
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 the first year (2017) we can clearly see that theater attendance is decreasing year by till the year
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2030.
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 it is below 5000 attendance it reaches 5000 after
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, the sporting events in 2017 and 2030
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. We can clearly say that it is
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the same
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 as the
theater
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 events
due to
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 slowly rising again. In 2017 it was almost 15000 numbers of attendances
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 in 2030 it will be nearly 16000.
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, as can be seen in de graph we can deem that it will be
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 in 2030.
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 it may be the highest increase.
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 other
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 a
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 improvement in the chart

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore, however".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "improvement" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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