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An increasing number of schools provide tablets and laptop computers for students to use in school, replacing books and other printed materials like exams and assignments. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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Nowadays the number of schools providing tablets and laptops increased a lot. Students use
technologic
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devices
while
 researching, doing homework etc.
instead
 of books and other printed materials.
This
 situation has some advantages and disadvantages.
While
 using
technologic
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devices
,
children
 find the
informations
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information
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 easier. The important part is, they do
this
 without getting out of their comfort zone. Information being reachable for everyone is a good thing too.
Also
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 it is more usable for teachers, they can teach
children
easier
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 than past. Working life is
being
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easier for teachers, and funnier for
children
while
 using
technologic
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devices
. There are some disadvantages too.
Firstly
while
 using technological
devices
,
children
 get used to comfort and when they face hard
works
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 they
got
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 trouble with it.
Secondly
, having information from books and printed materials is important for their
mentally developing
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.
Also
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informations
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information
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 from websites
are
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 not true
oftenly
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often
. That’s why
internet
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the internet
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 is a dangerous place. In conclusion, day by day the
devices
 that are used
changes
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 like everything does.
This
 has some bad and good sides.
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Expand your range of vocabulary and use more varied and precise lexical choices to express your ideas effectively.
grammatical range
Pay closer attention to sentence structure, verb tenses, and subject-verb agreement to improve grammatical accuracy.

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