An increasing number of schools provide tablets and laptop computers for students to use in school, replacing books and other printed materials like exams and assignments. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

Nowadays the number of schools providing tablets and laptops increased a lot. Students use
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devices
while
researching, doing homework etc.
instead
of books and other printed materials.
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situation has some advantages and disadvantages.
While
using
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devices
,
children
find the
informations
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easier. The important part is, they do
this
without getting out of their comfort zone. Information being reachable for everyone is a good thing too.
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it is more usable for teachers, they can teach
children
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than past. Working life is
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easier for teachers, and funnier for
children
while
using
technologic
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devices
. There are some disadvantages too.
Firstly
while
using technological
devices
,
children
get used to comfort and when they face hard
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they
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trouble with it.
Secondly
, having information from books and printed materials is important for their
mentally developing
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.
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informations
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from websites
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not true
oftenly
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often
. That’s why
internet
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is a dangerous place. In conclusion, day by day the
devices
that are used
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like everything does.
This
has some bad and good sides.
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