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The chart below gives information about science qualifications held by people in two countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about science qualifications held by people in two countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart shows the data on various kinds of
science
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 degrees obtained by Singaporean and
Malaysian
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 residents.
Overall
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, the proportion of
Malaysian
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 people who held no qualification in
science
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 and school leaving exams slightly exceeds that of Singaporeans;
in contrast
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, the figure for bachelor’s degrees finds a significant reverse.
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, the percentage of master’s degrees is equal for both countries and lowest when weighed with other types of
science
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 diplomas. Just under 65% of
Malaysian
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 citizens don’t have any certificate in
science
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, compared to about 60% in Singapore. The rate of school leaving exams gained by Malaysians is higher than that of Singaporeans, with respective ones being around 35% and 30%. 20% of Singaporean students go to a university and acquire a bachelor’s degree,
while
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 only 10% of
Malaysian
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 people do so, leading to a dramatic difference between the two Southeast Asian nations.
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, the figure for master's diplomas is similar for both, at nearly 5%.
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