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The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart above shows information about various professions in the U.K. and their salaries. The table shows the average working hours per week for each profession Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart provides information concerning the salaries of various professions in the UK and the average working
hours
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 per week for each profession are represented in the table. The data can be divided into two groups, namely the number that experienced an upward trend and a downward trend. Figures are given in Pounds.
Overall
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, It can be clearly seen that the salaries of every given occupation have increased over the period,
whereas
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 the highest working
hours
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 job is firefighter.
To begin
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 with the firefighter, their number of salary has been moderately raised by 100 from the given time
while
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 the average weekly job duration is 55
hours
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. Moving on to nurses and underground drivers, the income rates have increased by 100 which is the same level as firefighters when they work about 38 and 36
hours
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 per week respectively. The exception is the police because
this
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 is the only occupation in which their income rate has risen by 200,
while
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 their office hour per week is 40.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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