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People who live in lagre cities face a range of problems in their daily life. What are most significant off these problems? How can these problems be tackled

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In daily life, individuals who live in urban
area
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areas
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 face a variety of problems the
roof
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 cause
for
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this
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 is
the
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air
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 pollution and it can be solved by the actions of the
government
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. The principal cause of the
air
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 of
cities
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 is
polluted
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pollution
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. It must be recognized that the number of vehicles in
cities
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 is very high and
also
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 the emission of industries, and they emit a large amount of carbon monoxide and sulfur dioxide
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 the
air
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.
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, the ozone layer the big
cities
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 is destroyed and it
cause
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the
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global warming. In
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fact that way countries in Asia,
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 as Vietnam, Ha Noi and Ho Chi Minh
city
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 are the ones of the most polluted
cities
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 and
also
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 Da Lat
city
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where was
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had
the
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 cold atmosphere, but now the temperate is higher than in the past.
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, the solution can be found by the
government
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’s actions. The most effective approach is
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government
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 was
publicized
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 the benefits of using
he
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electric transport or
bicycle
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bicycles
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 and
warning
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people
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 about the bad effects of using
vehicle
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vehicles
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 which
is
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use
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fossils fuel
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fossil fuels
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 like gasoline or oil.
About
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 the industries, the
government
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 must
to
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have
the
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a
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 solution
in tackled
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to tackle
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 the
emission
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emissions
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.
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, the number of
vehicle
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vehicles
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 in urban
area
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areas
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 will be reduced and the
air
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 will be
more
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fresh
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.
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the amount of
people
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 who use electric
train
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trains
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higher
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is higher
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 than the ones who use their vehicles. In conclusion,
people
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 living in metros face problems
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 as traffic congestion, increased cost of living and pollution. The
government
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 can improve the situation by developing small
cities
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 around large
cities
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 and encouraging
people
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 to move to them.
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task response
Ensure a clear and direct response to the essay prompt. Address all parts of the question and provide a well-developed argument.
coherence cohesion
Improve the organization and coherence of ideas. Use linking words and phrases to create a logical flow of information.
lexical resource
Expand your vocabulary by using a wider range of words and expressions. Use more precise and appropriate vocabulary to convey your ideas.
grammatical range
Work on your grammar to improve sentence structure and accuracy. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement, verb tenses, and word order.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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